Wednesday, February 29, 2012

Update: Walmart Synthesis Essay

Please provide me a printed version MLA style essay, double spaced, on March 7th.  Posting the first draft your blog is optional, but the second draft will be mandatory for the blogs (complete with embedded links and proper pics etc). 

Do: 
  • Include embedded links within your blog post that take the reader to the primary source (not your classmate's blog/wikipedia).  
  • Read up on the info I provided about synthesis essays.  
  • Make use of direct quotes, paraphrasing, and facts.  Mingle your analysis and focus on your argument as was done in The Price of Pickles.
  • Include a Works Cited list using MLA format.  Put this at the bottom of the essay in your blog. Add it as a separate piece of paper in the printed version.
  • Include a cover page for the printed version, and make it look like this: 

By making you post this on your blog and on paper, I want you to get practice adhering to university-formatted papers (usually MLA format) while aslo presenting it as a mixed media entity on the blog.  Have fun.  

Wednesday, February 22, 2012

1st Assignment: The Ode - Feedback and Scores


Generally, I was a bit disappointed with this writing assignment, but I blame some of this on myself.  By providing an example of something a former student wrote, I might have misled you into thinking that it was something to emulate.  Too many "odes" (most of them) shared the same tone and structure and "letter of apology" approach that "Dear Zzappegeuti" had, and no class has been able to match the 14th wave's creativity when I first assigned this a long time ago (probably because I didn't give them as much direction).  I simply said "make it poetic and take some risks" with your creative prose, and try not to write to something boring and mundane that is generic to everyone.

That said, I encourage you to read the criteria for each assignment I post here on the blog.  I may not mention a lot of this in class (I would like classes to be more discussion based), but I do expect you to read carefully and make sure you've thought about the guidelines. I did say I wanted you to use alliteration and repetition with some poetic description, working towards true "apostrophe" and personification. That's why I referenced Keats.

As for the scores below, if you see "Pending" next to your name, that means you will get your score once you've made the changes to your first draft on the blog.  If you don't make them, you get an 88.  If you do make the changes, the sky is the limit.  Why am I doing it like this?
  •  It takes me a bit of time to read your work, and even longer to mark it up with red pen. I want to make sure my time is not wasted.
  • If you don't address your mistakes, you won't improve your writing, and you may end up attending Harvard University still mixing verb tenses and writing sentences without "the" or "a" in them.  
  • I realize some of you have spent little to no time abroad, so I don't think it is fair for you to get a B because of that.  If your effort to improve is earnest and displayed, I will focus mostly on content.  But I have to see the effort.  
I have left comments on all of your work, and if you want to change the content that is fine.  That goes for everyone - "Pending" or not. If I see a second draft of anything (always label it "Second Draft" and do not delete the first one), or extra writing, it will definitely count towards Participation scores and put you in a good position for a better score at the end of the year.  This is another reason why I prefer using the blogs over paper.

Again, I think you will find less generosity with grades now that you are no longer Freshman.  Try to produce quality work consistently, try to say things in class, and try to get things in on time.  I will deduct .5 per day from now on.

Charizard
9.3
Mewtwo
9.2
Blastoise
9.25
Lugia
9.0
Dragonite
9.3
Rayquaza
9.3
Zapdos
8.95
Tyranitar
9.0
Arcanine
9.1
Ho-Oh
9.0
Venusaur
8.9
Gengar
9.2
Raikou
9.2
Kyogre
9.3
Snorlax
9.0
Alakazam
9.4
Scizor
8.9

Friday, February 17, 2012

Synthesis Essay: Forming an Opinion on Walmart

FAQ:
When is it due? I don't know. When I feel like it is time.
Why should I put effort into this? Because you guys should practice this kind of writing for AP and SAT.  And Walmart is relevant to just about everything.  You will learn stuff.
How long should it be?  As long as it takes to incorporate three brief discussions about three sources with sufficient weight given to an overall evaluation.  Definitely more than 500 words and 5 paragraphs.  Don't be afraid of 700 to 1000+.  Quality not quantity is your goal.
Is this a normal assignment? No. It is abnormal. It's probably going to be worth more than most things I assign you, because I expect you to do more work and more reading.
How can I make sure I get an A?  Say stuff in class. Don't sleep. Don't start your essay at 11 pm the day before it is due.  As you know, there is a 20% quota for B's, and I might have to find creative ways to decide who gets them.  Handing in stuff late might be a way, or sleeping and not saying stuff.:)

 
Hello Juniors,

As mentioned in class, we are preparing for a "synthesis essay" regarding the larger than life corporation - Walmart.  There is no shortage of material out there that criticizes the giant, but I also welcome you to find sources that legitimize it.  It might be that Walmart isn't  "all bad," and an entirely natural (and inevitable) result of American ethos.  Bigger, faster, cheaper, more.  Who doesn't like a giant bag of chips for 99 cents?  It may be that the environment and the third world and working class single mother's suffer a bit (or a great deal) because of this giant bag of chips...but in the end this giant bag of chips makes a lot of people happy (and unhealthy)!



MANDATORY READING:




Why mandatory? It was the reason I decided to assign this essay in the first place, and it's simply an engaging essay that is thorough and balanced.  It explores the issues surrounding Walmart from all angles, and I'd like you to emulate some of what the writer achieves.  There is a lot to learn from writing this essay, and I hope you come away with some valuable insights (and future fodder for SAT essays).

We did get a chance to see parts of the documentary, Walmart: The High Cost of Low Price , and it is available here in its entirety if you feel like a closer look.


As mentioned in class, I'd like you all to supply one source of Walmart-related media (news article, video, website) that can serve as a potential source of opinion while writing.  Each of you will graded on this, and you will be asked to incorporate 3 sources into your essay - using them and referencing them and interacting with them to flesh out your central opinion.  It does not have to be directly related to Walmart, but it does have to be a part of the overall picture. This essay will involve three graded components:
  1. Discussion about your source.
  2. Choosing your 3 sources and forming a thesis (posted on your blog).
  3. Writing the essay.

We will look at a synthesis sample essay from AP before actually writing.  It will be AP in style and execution.  Here is a description of what a synthesis essay is directly from AP:

What Is the Synthesis Essay on the Exam Like?

Basically, the student is presented with an introduction to and a description of an issue that has varying viewpoints associated with it. Accompanying this is a selection of sources that address the topic. These sources can be written texts that could include nonfiction, fiction, poetry, or even drama, as well as visual texts, such as photos, charts, artwork, cartoons, and so forth.

After carefully reading and annotating the sources, the student is required to respond to the given prompt with an essay that incorporates and synthesizes at least THREE of the sources in support of his position on the subject.

What Is the Purpose of the Synthesis Essay?

The College Board wants to determine how well the student can do the following:
  • Read critically
  • Understand texts
  • Analyze texts
  • Develop a position on a given topic
  • Support a position on a given topic
  • Support a position with appropriate evidence from outside sources
  • Incorporate outside sources into the texts of the essay
  • Cite sources used in the essay
The synthesis essay is a chance to demonstrate your ability to develop a "researched idea," using not only your personal viewpoint, but also the viewpoints of others. This essay is a reflection of your critical reading, thinking, and writing skills.

What Kinds of Synthesis Essays Can I Expect?

The synthesis essay has two primary approaches. The first kind of synthesis essay is one you're probably familiar with. This is the expository essay in which you develop your thesis and support it with specific examples from appropriate sources. You could develop this type of synthesis essay using any of the rhetorical strategies, such as:
  • Compare and contrast
  • Cause and effect
  • Analysis
The second kind of synthesis essay presents an argument. Here, you take a position on a particular topic and support this position with appropriate outside sources, while indicating the weaknesses of other viewpoints.  You should be ready to write either of these two types of synthesis essays. Given the nature of the AP Language exam, however, it is more likely that you will be presented with a synthesis essay prompt that requires a response in the form of an argument. 

The important thing is to practice composing both types of synthesis essays. Practice. Practice. Being familiar and comfortable with the synthesis process is the crucial factor.
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Here is another source from AP College Board on how to best execute your argument.

Wednesday, February 8, 2012

1st Assingment: The Ode

UPDATE: Please be creative with this assignment, and think deeply about the "thing" or "entity" you will address.  I really like this assignment because it often produces the "best work" I get to read from individual students.  You can hand it into me on paper if you like, or simply post it on the blogs.  Whichever method you are comfortable with.  Have fun. 

What is an "ode?"  Let's ask Wikipedia:

An ode is typically a lyrical verse written in praise of, or dedicated to someone or something which captures the poet's interest or serves as an inspiration for the ode.

In fact, the "greatest poem ever written" is an ode written by the famous English poet, John Keats - Ode to a Nightingale.  He died very young, and many believed if he'd lived longer that he could have rivaled William Shakespeare as one of the greatest writers ever.

This poem is one of those which university professors continually dissect and write lengthy dissertations on.  It is filled to the brim with subtext and hidden meanings, some of which Keats may have even intended.  The theme of transience  is just one of many things we can discuss: how does man compare to a bird?  What is the difference between joy and happiness?  What is the relationship between imagination and reality?  

The 5 W's of the poem (when and where and why it was written) are interesting. One day, while  sitting under a tree, Keats notices a nightingale bird land in the branches and began to sing.  Deathly ill, and perhaps high on opium, he begins to write - envious of the bird's freedom and health.  Thus, "Ode to a Nightingale" was born, and many consider this to be a "perfect poem."
 


Keats is truly amazing.  For our purposes, we are going to change things a little and basically write a poetic letter to something or somewhere instead of someone.

Some terms we can associate with this exercise:
  • Personification - assigning an object with human qualities. 
  • Apostrophe - in this case not the thing on your keyboard, but the AP Rhetorical Device.

Imagine what you might say in a letter that begins with:

Dear Seoul,
Dear California,
Dear North Korea,
Dear iPhone,
Dear PS3,
Dear Sadness,
Dear Boredom,
Dear English,
Dear K-Pop,
Dear EOP,
Dear Cockroach,
Dear Metal Chopsticks,
Dear Sleep,
Dear Bed,
Dear Starcraft,
Dear Angry Birds,
Dear Pizza,
Dear Broccoli,
Dear Internet,
Dear Harry Potter Series,

The possibilities are endless, and I want you to write a poetic letter using lots of descriptive writing and philosophical insight.  Think of that object or place as a friend or enemy that you know very well.  Metaphorically give it qualities that are human, and have fun poeticizing the things you love, hate, or hate to love or love to hate about that thing.

This should be written as a letter and a poem mixed together in a style of writing we might call "lyrical prose."  Imagine your sentences are music, and each word a note.  You can start thinking about:

Alliteration: using words with similar sounds in one sentence, sort of like a tongue twister.
Example - "The sweet sound of your soft voice silences my spirit into a still sleep."

This sentence has a smooth ring to it, all because "s" was used repeatedly in a musical way.

Repetition: repeating a sentence structure for more emphasis.  Politicians use this a lot when they make speeches.
Example - "We can make change.  We can fight for freedom.  We can be the light through the world's darkness.  We are America, and yes we can!"

So try and use these while you write your ode.  This is not really a poem, so try to write in the vicinity of 500 words. Include a picture and be creative (and clean) with your formatting.

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Fine Examples:

This assignment is probably one of my favorites to give, as it often produces samples of writing which students can consider among their best.  From the 15th wave, one of my KMLA students, Hwee Jun, wrote a very strong one last semester, which delivered everything this assignment asks for, and more. 

Here is another really good one from another KMLA students, Seung Hyun in the 14th wave.  It's one of my favorite essays ever written by a KMLA student.  What's to like about this one?  At face value, it appears to be very simple.  And it is.  But if we read between the lines, there is a lot of comment on cultural diversity.  I think this could make a very good children's book if the idea was taken and re-framed a little.

Ode to ZzaPaGeuTi
By Seung Hyun Ryu (Amy)


Dear ZzaPaGeuTi (짜파게티),

Do you remember back when I was in elementary school? Id come home after a long and busy day, and immediately look for you. Thankfully, you were always there beside me whenever I needed you. However tired I was, you, with your warm brown scent, always made me feel comfortable and re-energized. Not only did you reduce my stress and tiredness of getting through the day, but you also helped soothe my feelings of homesickness for Korea. Ever since I was young, the thing I always miss most when Im away from Korea is the food. Luckily, I could easily meet you, dressed up in your fancy clothes in the Chinese marts of England. Its a secret to my good friend La Myun (라면), but I love you much more than her. While La Myun has a fiery temper, you are always warm and sweet towards me.


     You might find it a little surprising that after all these years of scarcely talking or meeting, I would suddenly write a letter to you. This surprise would have been doubled I suppose, because I began this letter full of praise for you while I have totally ignored you all this time. To make things a little less confusing, I will be very straightforward with you. The reason why Im writing this letter is to apologize for something that happened between us a long time ago. Even after all these years, I feel guilt over what I have done to you. Thus, I have mustered up the courage to write this letter. 
 
         Im sure that you recall the day that I introduced you for the first and last time to a friend I had made in England. Her name was Paulina, and she was a delicate little girl who had never lived outside of England. Well, when Paulina came over to my house, I introduced you to her. You were my favorite friend, so there was no reason for me to hesitate in doing so. I had absolutely no worries about whether Paulina would like you or not. After all, why wouldnt she love you as much as I did, when you were so deliciously kind and always extending your long, long noodley arms to help someone in need?


         However, to this day, I just cannot forget the expression on Paulinas face when she saw you. She was horrified by your color, and asked how I could possibly like someone who looked like you - someone who had a dirty mud color and a mop of straggly hair. She did not even bother to get acquainted with you, and announced that she would not speak a word to you because, on the whole, you looked like a bowl filled with dirty worms. Not only you, my dear friend ZzaPaGueTi, but also I was greatly affected by this incident. 

Regretfully, I was not old enough to realize that it was my friend who was shallow to judge you based on appearances. I should not have cared what Paulina said. Although you look a little odd in England, because of your dark skin color and straggly curly hair, that is simply because there are not so many like you in England, as there are in Korea. Furthermore, I should have been wise enough to realize that I loved you regardless; never mind what you look like.  Regretfully, I failed this wisdom at such a young age.  

         Hopefully, it is not too late to ask for your forgiveness. Although I have feigned not to notice you all these years, it was mainly because I did not have enough courage to beg for your forgiveness.  And not because I didnt want to be your friend again.  It was only when I was young and ignorant that I foolishly felt embarrassed by you, for being who you are. I dearly hope that you will understand me with your warm sweet heart, and once again embrace me with your long delicate arms.

         Hope to hear from you soon,
         With Love, Seung Hyun.